THE GOLD FISH BOWL NEEDED A SCRIPT ADVISOR

I mentioned earlier that various stories about women’s violent outbursts inspired me to write The Gold Fish Bowl.  So I wrote the screenplay feverishly and quickly with very little editing.   When the first draft was done, and I read through it, I realized too many questions emerged about realism, sequences, symbolism, dialogue, procedures, character differentiation, exclusions, inclusions.  I was lost in my own creation.

Needing an impartial editor, I asked  Steve Keddy, to consult with me on the screenplay.  Winner of myriad writing awards, Steve’s keen observations of literary merit, visual narrative, human nature, and character appropriate dialogue reshaped many scenes adding credibility to the story.  Steve’s insights have given depth to both Hart Cane’s and Derek Winter’s characters and have added subtle nuances to Mara’s behavior.   The Gold Fish Bowl has a stronger foundation because of Steve's careful scrutiny.

                                                                                       Steve Keddy, Script Consultant and Writer